A person's actions sometimes determine what type of person he/she is. There are many reasons of how I could explain why, but I will narrow it down to be more persuasive. Someones actions sometimes determine what type of person they are because you can choose your own actions, you can be influenced, and people don't know the reasons behind your actions.
You have the ability to choose your own actions. You can think of what you're doing and you may be able to process it in your mind and realize it's bad or good. it's not like anyone is physically forcing you to do something.
Sometimes people are influenced by others. You can be peer pressured and don't actually want to do that certain thing. Other times, people do things that others do, so they fit in or are "cool".
People don't know the reasons of your actions. For all they know, you could have a logical and understandable reason to do something. For example, you could be sick or have cancer and have to smoke marijuana because it is used for medicine. That doesn't make you a "burn-out" or a "loser". Others shouldn't judge a book by it's cover. They don't even know if you really want to be doing it, but you have to do it.
In conclusion, a person's actions don't always determine what type of person they are. You do have the right and ability to choose your own actions. You can be influenced by peers' actions. No one knows all the reasons/facts behind your actions.
I think that your essay was very well written. You had your thesis and had all three of your reasons to back up your claim, although you didn't have any warrants and your paragraphs were a little short, it was still good
ReplyDeleteIt was a very good essay. It had good reasoning, but kind of short paragrahs. Overall it was a very well written essay.
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